(I’ve written about my teeth till I’m ‘blue in the face.’
I think my tooth extraction was a bit of a disgrace
I’ve been in so much pain, but they don’t know why
The doctor gave me morphine, so now I’m rather high)
I think I’ll change the subject; I’m finding this a bore
I’ll shut those tedious thoughts out and open a new door
I’ll pick up my new book and turn page after page
I can concentrate much better; now I’m not so full of rage
So, let us wander elsewhere; my muse is very willing
No more talk of teeth and pain, extractions and fillings
I’m sitting at my laptop as I search for something fresh
The screen’s gone blank, as the page has just refreshed!
I don’t want more laptop trouble; I’ve had enough of that
Now, Peanut’s on the keyboard; that blooming nuisance cat!
How’s a girl to think with this commotion going on?
Now the doorbell’s ringing; oh, damn, it’s neighbour, John!
Will I ever get this poem written and finished to the end?
All of these distractions are driving me ‘round the bend
The cat’s now sleeping peacefully, dreaming in her bed
Oh, now she’s woken up again, demanding to be fed
There is no peace for me today to write and concentrate
Now, here comes the postman, walking through my gate
I’m hoping for a letter, but he says, no, they’re all bills
Pass the morphine, will you, I need a few more pills.
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45 thoughts on “Commotion (A Poem)”
Glad to see you are getting your teeth into writing again!
Thanks, Geoff. It was nice to write something that wasn’t solely about teeth again! I’m still in a lot of pain, but I won’t let that stop me from writing, which is my passion.
Seems like you’ve got a sense of humor about it all, that’s good. Any diagnosis yet? You’ve had a bad couple of weeks. Hoping the general arc of your life is on an upward swing now.
I think I have to have a sense of humour to make the pain more bearable, Jeff. My doctor thinks it’s something called trigeminal neuralgia, which can be caused by damage through dental surgery! It doesn’t usually get better on its own, but there might be a drug I can take to relieve it (or further surgery). At the moment, it’s excruciating and is mainly like electric shocks going through my chin and gum on the side the tooth was taken out. If it’s caused by the surgery, I might be looking at trying to get some compensation from the dentist, as they are specialists in oral surgery. Maybe, I’m just unlucky, but currently, I’m taking morphine for the pain, which is a bit ridiculous given that I only went to have my tooth out. If you don’t laugh, you only cry. I decided if I’m going to be in pain, I won’t let it stop me from writing, which is my passion. Sink or swim, perhaps.
Love the perspective, and how you demonstrate the ability to reframe and utilize humor, even in painful circumstances!
Thanks, David. I’m still in a lot of pain but won’t let it stop me from writing. I decided I wanted to write something that wasn’t solely focussed on teeth! Or laptops breaking down!
Lovely to see your sense of humour.
Lots of love.
Thanks, Granny. I’m going to email you later. Love you lots, too. Xxx 💖🌹💕
Hey, Ellie! Sorry to hear you’ve still been in pain, but I’m glad you have something to help relieve it now. I was actually wondering while reading the poem whether there could have been nerve damage caused by the dentist, and then saw your response to Jeff. 😅
Take care of yourself. 🤗
Thank you, Curious Cappuccino (do you have a name you like to use on WP, or do you prefer to be known by your blog name?) Just wondering 😊. Take care of you, too.
Braden, Curious, or CC are good, too! I appreciate you asking. And I will. 🙏🤍
Thank you for letting me know, Braden (I like that name) 💙.
Aw, thank you! ❤️
The humor! John should know when to knock. Feel better, my friend.
Thank you kindly, Thompson. I am still in a lot of pain, but nevertheless, decided to write something that wasn’t strictly about teeth (and broken laptops!) X
Thanks for the laugh, Ellie.
You’re welcome, J. X
It sounds like special deliveries of kindness on cat feet and John, an odd indoor commotion storm, but I hear the rhymes opening writing doors in the fog. Grogginess can finesse away the blues, they say, to make intangible beasts float away and leave the angels behind.
Thank you for commenting, Doug. I appreciate it. I like your take on my poem. I hope you are well and having a good Sunday 😊.
I am disappointed in you Ellie. You know well that cats own humans, we don’t own them. When they take over, just be resigned. LOL. Great poem. I know how it is when I am trying to write a poem, and Anneplath or Kelly are crawling all over me or being loud and rambunctious and you just sigh and throw your hands up.
Lol. You are quite right about cats owning humans, of course! I’m glad you like my poem – thank you. Cats always choose their moments, don’t they; usually just when I’m in the middle of writing, just like you. I think Peanut rules in my house and she knows it! Sometimes, in the evening, she makes such a nuisance of herself and is so naughty, knocking things off of shelves and tables, until I give in and go to bed. She only does this when she wants something, too. It’s almost as if she’s planned her routine to get me to go to bed early! I wouldn’t mind but as soon as I’m in bed, she trots downstairs again and leaves me up there! I’m sure she does it to have the downstairs of the house all to herself! She’s a cheeky little madam.
I like you change you mind.. you written new subject of poem. I am so glad 😍. You convert your mind if teeth pain.
Thank you very much, Rajkkhoja. I am happy that you like my poem. Xx 😘
You are most welcome 🤗
Sorry to know that you are in pain
With all the medicines, you still managed to write a lovely poem.
I wish you a peaceful time ahead
Thank you so much, Devang. It was good to write my poem as it took my mind off my pain a bit. I’m so glad you liked it and thank you for your good wishes. X
Please take care
I hope you feel better soon
This post was 6 days ago… but I wonder If you are doing well.
Sending some positive energy.
Hi, Devang. Thank you very much for asking. I haven’t managed to write anything this week until just now. I’m still in a lot of pain with my tooth and jaw. I’ve also had my family staying with me from yesterday afternoon until Saturday lunchtime. It hasn’t left me anytime to settle down to write, and I’m finding it difficult to concentrate on writing with all this going on. Thank you so much for your positive energy – it’s much needed and much appreciated. I hope you are well and content.
Humour was the best part of this post!!
Loved it, Ellie👌
Thank you very much, Vidah. I’m so glad you liked it. Xx 💕
Loved that you were able to write with such good humour considering you’re in a lot of pain. Poor thing 😦 I pray your mouth/jaw will recover and that you’ll be pain free soon. Sending you gentle hugs from Australia xx
Thank you so much, dear Janet. I felt I needed a change from writing about my poem so miserably, so I thought I’d add a humourous aspect to the subject, although I can’t say I feel all that humourous while the pain is this bad. Thank you for your prayers for my pain to end. I’m not very hopeful as I believe there has been damage to the facial nerve caused by the oral surgery. The surgeon was a professional, but he did have an awful job in getting my tooth out, and I have to say it felt rather brutal at the time, and my friend, who was watching and holding my hand, confirms this. I only have enough morphine for three more days, as the doctors won’t give it out for longer because it’s so addictive. Ordinary painkillers don’t touch it. I’ve got to phone the dentist again tomorrow to let them know how I am. I wish I hadn’t had the tooth out in the first place; however, I didn’t have much choice. Thank you so much for your much-needed and appreciated gentle hugs, dear friend. Sending hugs your way, too. Xx 🥰
Wow! This is a fun and lovely poem, Ellie! 👍🏼😊I hope composing it made you feel a little better. May you fully recover soon. Take care.💖
Thank you, Aaysid. I’m so glad you enjoyed my poem. It did help to write it, although I’m still in constant pain. Thank you for your get well wishes, though. Take care of yourself, too. Xx 🥰
Wishing you a speedy recovery! Feel better soon!
Thank you, Tamara. The doctor thinks it’s nerve damaged that happened when I had my tooth taken out. I’ve been in agony ever since the extraction and it migiht not get better! I’ve been on various medications to ease the intnese pain, but nothing has worked up till now. Even morphine didn’t touch it and I didn’t like talking that anway. Now, my doctor has put me on Pregabalin, which is used in psychiatric medicine. I really don’t want to be on it,, as it causes drowsiness, dizziness, twitching and other annoying side effects.
I spoke to Citizen’s Advice this afternoon, who said I need to make a formal complaint to the dentist and see where I go from there. I deserve some compensation for all the pain and other ill-effects. I can’t eat properly, I can’t sleep, I can’t concentrate and I feel dizzy all the time, which is dangerous for me in case I fall. I might have to be on this drug for a long time, too, but the side-effects should lessen in time. Sorry to be moaning about all this. It has affected me very negatively, and I’m finding it hard to get back to my usual positive. Xx 😔.
Wow! That’s more than the usual tooth extraction pain. Yes, look into other avenues for compensation, and even treatment for the nerves. Wondering if some acupuncture would help the nerves?
Yes, it certainly wasn’t a straightforward extraction. I don’t like this new drug I’m having to take for the nerve pain. It makes a very slight difference to my pain, but the side effects are horrible. I am worried about falling because I’m so dizzy. Even writing is difficult as my mind isn’t focussing properly, and I feel shaky and unsteady, which makes me type slowly, and I’m making mistakes, which is driving me crazy. Apparently, Pregabalin is one of the best treatments for nerve pain. I might have to be on it for a long time. I hadn’t thought about acupuncture; however, I doubt I could afford it after spending nearly £600 for my private dental treatment, which has turned out to be a horrible nightmare. Xx 😔.
So sorry to hear this. Maybe getting a financial settlement would help you to afford the treatment you need.
I really love the playfulness of this poem, Ellie. Sometimes we just have to laugh at the absurdity of life, especially when we are hit with one thing after another. I really hope you start to feel better and get some answers. Sending you love and a great big hug (a gentle one).
Thank you, dear Bridgette. Yes, you’re right; sometimes, when all else fails, there is only humour left.
I’m still in a lot of pain, but I should be able take my new painkillers from Saturday afternoon when my family have gone home. I have to wait until my last painkillers have got out of my system. I’m hoping the new ones will have fewer side effects and that I can tolerate them.
Thank you so much for your love and for you large and very gentle hugs. They are all much appreciated and just what I need right now. Xx 💐💞
Im happy to see that you are still writing Ellie✍️✍️✍️.
We need you here!
Lots of love
Aww, thank you, Maggie. It’ll take a lot more than pain to stop me from writing unless, of course, you count writer’s block! I very much appreciate your kind words. I need all my blogging friends and readers, too. It’s all of my blogging family who keep me going, and I love you all for that. With my love to you, dear friend. Xx 💖💛💝